I visited Plenty of Fish today and read a number of men’s dating profiles. I found one that was friendly and positive throughout, but wasn’t engaging enough.
By providing you with an excerpt and my critique, hopefully it will prevent you from making the same mistakes. Women can benefit from this critique as well because it applies to women’s online dating profiles too. The mistakes here are pretty common and not gender-specific.
From the dating profile of a 37-year old guy.
Whhmm a little about myself….. I really enjoy the outdoors,hiking, camping, golfing, fishing normal guy stuff lol! I’m pretty easy going and I’m up for anything. friends and family are important in life and I really enjoy meeting new people.
My critique.
The best online dating profiles have strong openers and approximately 250 words of copy. Because this is an About Me summary, starting off with “a little about myself” is redundant. Between that and the fact that it’s not interesting, that opener ends up being a waste of prime space.
Instead go straight into who you are and, better still, do it in way that’s unique. For instance, instead of going straight into a list of interests, give some really interesting anecdote that then segues into your pastimes.
Example of a great online dating profile opener.
I once shared my dinner with a bear. It was the most interesting camping experience to date. Though less adventuresome, I also like golfing, fishing and hiking.
See? That opener is much better and now his profile doesn’t start off with a boring list.
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