I decided to scan some arbitrary dating profiles in the Los Angeles area this week. Over the next few days I’ll post excerpts from some of them and then critique them while providing profile writing tips based on my expertise in ad writing and marketing (check out my bio).
Here’s the first excerpt from a man in his 40’s followed by my critique:
If you can’t make time to meet after emailing/texting for a week…then you’re not the girl for me. I’m not into chat buddies. I don’t drink and don’t like women who get hammered. Also, I have one son, not two. So don’t ask about my kid(s) because you’re obviously illiterate. Lastly, I’m looking for a woman that’s FIT. I won’t date Rosanne. Oh and you need to like a guy who’s direct.
Needless to say he sounds about as warm and fuzzy as Rush Limbaugh. There’s just nothing pleasant about this guy at all. He will certainly attract women, but not the kind with any level of self-esteem.
In addition to, well, everything – he also puts a deadline on how long he’ll “tolerate” the email process. Emails are important. Far too many people think of them as annoyances, especially men. In fact, there an important aspect of online dating. They allow time to catch red flags. They also allow for some ice breakers before you meet up.
Here are two blogs I’ve written on the subject of emails, which go into greater detail: Dating profiles and Silent Nights and Online Dating and the Top 3 Reasons Why Emails Matter.
Finally, does really need to qualify that he’s direct? For a guy who’s so concerned about literacy, he sure doesn’t understand the meaning of direct. It’s not interchangeable with mean-spirited and rude.
About me
Finding love online isn’t easy. A lot of factors affect success and many are out of control. How you present yourself, however, is in your control. What’s more, you can maximize your chances of success by seeking expert help with your online dating profile.
As an ad writer, I’ve spent years making products stand out and get noticed. I now use those skills to help singles dating online stand out and get noticed too.
Better still, I ask a lot of questions and take a very collaborative approach with my clients. That way, I craft a profile using your words and anecdotes so that you go online with an honest representation and one that makes you feel great about yourself.
Have a look at the online dating profile samples of my work.
Better yet, just go straight to the online personality quiz then submit the answers to me. You’ll be amazed at what I can do with them!
